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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.
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The line graph
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 the proportion of the
population
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 living in towns in four nations in Asia (Indonesia,
Malaysia
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,
Philippines
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, and
Thailand
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) between 1970 and 2020, with a forecast for 2030 and 2040.
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,
Malaysia
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 and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 were at
the
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 similar level, but both followed different trajectories towards the end of the
period
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.
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, there was a slight increase at the beginning in the number of residents of
Thailand
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city
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,
but
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later it remained relatively stable. Indonesia,
on the other hand
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, experienced a significant
rise
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 throughout the
period
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.
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, it can be seen that there was
general
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 upward trend in the
population
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, albeit to varying degrees. In 1970, the rate of
population
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 of
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malaysia
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 and
philippine
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 towns were approximately 30%, the percentage increased modestly for
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malaysia
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, it hit
the
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 peak at just over 70% in 2020 and is expected to exceed four-fifth by 2040.
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Philippines
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The Philippines
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,
however
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, fluctuated over the same
period
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 and recorded about 40% of
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population
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the population
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 in 2020. By 2040, a
further
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 10% increase is expected in
this
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 country.
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,
Thailand
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 stood at just under 20% in 1970, it
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 by about 10% to just under 30% in the year 1990. Though
,
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 the figures remained the same for
next
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the next
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 three decades, It is expected to
rise
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 to nearly 50% by 2040, which means that
Thailand
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 city will remain the least populated among these four countries.
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 were at roughly 13% in 1970, it later enjoyed a huge
rise
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 over the same
period
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. By 2020, it reached 50% and is predicted to
rise
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 modestly by about 10% in 2040, which will be the second most populated nation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia, philippines, thailand, period, rise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "modestly" was used 2 times.
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