Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person's decision making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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The ability of an individual to make certain decisions can be influenced by many factors. Even when we think that a specific idea
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genuinely
ours, that same idea could have been incepted into our brains without us
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. There is no consensus on
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wether advertizing
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whether advertising
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has a strong impact on people's
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ability or
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deemed as
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non-influential
. In
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essay, we will delve deep and analyze both points of view before we can bring out an opinion.
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it is primarily
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to take into consideration the small steps, and their sequence, which the brain takes as it gathers information.
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, it is evident that the brain
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bits of knowledge through attention which indeed we have no control on.
such
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an example strongly
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that
advertisment
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advertising
can easily hook our attention and implement ideas.
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, some argue that it can have a strong effect on a person's
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process.
On the other hand
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, others embrace the
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that the brain can distinguish its
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information
from what it is not, and saying
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undermines its capabilities.
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, they solidify their assumption by bringing up strategies, like the hat
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, which if implemented can play a vital role in eliminating distractions and providing multiple aspects to look from.
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, the effect of
advertisment
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advertisement
can
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be rolled
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out easily by some techniques and
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has
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little
or no impact on decision making. To summarize, both parties have explained their point of
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and provided detailed examples. Personally, I strongly support the
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that we are under astonishingly considerable influence posed by the
advertisments
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advertisements
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we can not draw a line over
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argument in the meantime,
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further
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analysis can help sort
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issue.
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