The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
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The graph illustrates the
amount
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of hours spent listening to
radio
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the radio
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and watching television during the day by the English population over 4 years old
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October to December 1992.
According to
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this
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data, the British people watched television in the evening
while
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they listened to
radio
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the radio
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in the morning and in the early afternoon. Indeed, there was a hitting peak of
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audience in the morning around 9 am, with a sharp increase to 8
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at 6am to approximately 30
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at 9am. After a slight increase from 10% to 12% at 4pm, it declined gradually through the day to reach 0% at night, at 02:00 am to be precise.
In contrast
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, the pattern of television’s audience showed more fluctuations during the day. Starting with 0% at 6 am, it rose to 8% at 8am.
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, it grew to 18% at 2 pm and it reached a peak at 8 pm with 50% of the population.
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, it dropped dramatically with
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0% at 2 am and a slight
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at 5am.
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