Compared to the past, more people are now studying abroad because it is more convenient and cheaper than before. Do you think this is beneficial to the foreign student’s home country?

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task achievement

Consider restating the essay topic in the introduction to ensure complete task response.

coherence cohesion

Improve logical flow by organizing ideas more clearly. Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea supported with examples.

task achievement

Enhance clarity by using more specific examples of benefits to the home country, such as economic gains or knowledge exchange.

coherence cohesion

Use transitional phrases to better connect ideas between paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, contributing to a well-structured response.

task achievement

Good effort in addressing both advantages to the foreign students and their home country.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

255 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

brain drain
knowledge transfer
cultural understanding
economic investments
international business
global exposure
networking
advanced knowledge
technical skills
foster tolerance
harmonious society
foreign investments
diplomatic relations
innovation
home country's development

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