In many countries young people are granted certain privileges and responsibilities at the age of sixteen. clearly parents have a responsibility to both care for and prepare their children as they approach this important milestone. to what degree should parents intervene in the lives of their 14-15 year old children?

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It is predicted that in the near future card or virtual wallets on mobile phones will be replaced by cash for shopping.I strongly agree with

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will outline my reasons in the essay. Paying by card and virtual phones may bring us so many significant advantages in our daily lives.It is safe and compared with money and it is so convenient,that individuals do not have to bring their money everywhere.

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safety,these days we have to be aware of theft and by not using and keeping cash we can reduce its incidents.

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, on the other side being dependent on these cards may have some serious and negative impacts on people's lives and

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their minds.One of the biggest problems is credit cards will enable people to pay more than they have and their property

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they are involved with paying a debt which is not logical.Another example of

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unsatisfactory is the countries which are not as developed as others .So in the future, they will be faced with crucial problems

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as hacking bank accounts. In conclusion, with the advancement of technology, we could not prevent

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these changes.With these changes not only our lives

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straightforward but

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The essay provides a general response to the given topic, but it lacks depth in developing arguments. Consider expanding on key arguments with more details and examples.

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Your introduction clearly states your position. However, the development of ideas in the body paragraph needs to be more organized and focused. Try using clear topic sentences to guide the reader through your argument.

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Enhance your task response by incorporating more specific examples and scenarios that can strengthen your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.

coherence cohesion

Your introduction and conclusion are present and serve their purpose effectively by clearly stating your position and summarizing your points.

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The essay addresses both perspectives, outlining benefits of cashless transactions and its potential drawbacks.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

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