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The plan below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps
illustrates
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 a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
Overall
, there is a significant difference throughout the years. There is an
expand
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 in
shower
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the shower
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 and
toilets
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toilet
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area
 near the main road in the
north west
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northwest
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 of the map. The shower and toilets are built
besides
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 the car parks.
Furthermore
, the
area
 of fishing boats and marina for private yachts has been switched with the fishing boats located in the
north west
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,
whereas
marina
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the marina
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 is in
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the south
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south west
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. In 2000, there
is
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 no commercial
area
 in the harbour. Meanwhile, today, there are
a
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cafes & shops
as well as
a
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spaces for
lifeboat
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lifeboats
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besides
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 the marina
area
. There is
also
 a new pave that
lead
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 to a hotel,
while
 in 2000 the hotel used to be a castle
that is
 disused. The private beach near the hotel
also
belong
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for
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 the guests only.
Additionally
, there
are
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also
 a new development in the north harbour where a new dock is built for the yachts or ferries.
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introduction conclusion present
Include a conclusion that summarises the main changes observed.
relevant specific examples
Ensure the specific examples are clear and details do not contradict each other, such as clarifying the differences in location in a distinct way.
complete response
The essay provides a clear overview of the harbour's changes from 2000 to today.
supported main points
Main features and changes in the harbour are identified and described in the essay.

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