In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e.g literatures), boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree?

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with their family and their friends. As
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result, their
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to their lifestyle. İn addition,
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it. İnitially, a lot of
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many departments
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by their passions. One experiment shows abilities and
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passion and
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choose
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passion, they choose
science
subjects
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no specific reasons for
choose
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arts
or
science
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personality and ability. Some
students
like
arts
on the other hand
some
students
like
science
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • unconsciously
  • proficiency
  • bias
  • segmentation
  • perceived
  • prevalent
  • encourage
  • influence
  • role models
  • early education
  • traditional norms
  • societal expectations
  • tendency
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