The charts below show the average perchentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average perchentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts provide information about the average ratio of three types of
nutrients
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that may cause unhealthy effects if consumed in excess in 4 different meals.
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considerable amount can be noticed in sodium in dinner and
suger
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sugar
in snacks which are almost
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the same percentage. As we can see by overeating breakfast the proportion of these three
nutrients
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is the lowest compared to the others.The unhealthiest food with
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is dinner.It has 43% of sodium and 37% of fat which contain the highest
percent
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per cent
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of these two
nutrients
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.On the other
side
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snacks
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concerned as
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another
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unhealthy food because of the ratio of
suger
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sugar
which is
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42%
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it
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is the highest.The ratio of lunch in of the three
nutrients
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almost
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the same with the differences of 10% and it has the lowest percentage of
suger
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sugar
on it.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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