Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?
In
this
modern day
, it is increasingly common for people
to have low or no connection with their neighbours
because of modern lifestyles, and the influence of technology. Moreover
, the habits of some neighbours
make the society of neighbours
uncomfortable. This
essay will consider the cause of this
issue and propose effective solutions to address it.
To begin
with, today several individuals spend time focusing on self-development even children or adults for example
children have to be concerned with academics and adults also
focus on their job responsibilities so it makes some people
lose the energy to socialize ; in particular
, in urban areas
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Furthermore
, technology has influenced individuals' lives in the present due to
people
having social-media connections which reduce
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reduces
people
rely on massage apps to stay connected. On the other hand
, some people
have toxic relationships with neighbours
; for example
, some neighbours
always have a gossip group with personal stories of someone and it creates a toxic environment.
To tackle this
problem; firstly
, communities should Organize activities for various festivals to encourage people
in the communities such
as Halloween, Christmas or easter day
to participate in activities and break the ice when they become familiar with each other by participating in activities together. Secondly
, creating shared spaces , for instance
, parks or playgrounds can help people
meet nature however
, it may not help filter out toxic people
because it is a problem that we have to deal with our own feelings about what these people
will gossip about even if it is fake news. On the other hand
, it helps to practice patience with difficult things like being gossiped about themselves.
To sum up
, the growing distance between neighbours
is caused by lifestyles changing with modern-day
and the habitat of neighbours
that is
out of control. Nevertheless
having a space or activity where you can bond with your neighbours
is a good thing because it will make you have more friends or you can benefit from your neighbours
on a difficult day
because your neighbours
can help you the fastest if there is an accident in your house.Submitted by np.napatping on
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task achievement
Try to provide more concrete examples and expand on your ideas. For instance, explain how participating in community events can specifically improve relationships with neighbors. This will make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Work on the organization of your ideas. While you have a logical flow, transitioning more smoothly between points could improve readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure to vary sentence structures to maintain reader interest and enhance the overall fluidity of your writing.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing your argument well.
task achievement
You identified key reasons why people might not know their neighbors and proposed relevant solutions, indicating a good understanding of the topic.