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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphic represents the
number
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 of attendees to a few
museums
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 from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of visitors to the Vatican
Museums
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 kept increasing through the years, meanwhile, the London Science
Museum
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 has experienced the opposite.
According to
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 the data, two
museums
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 have caught the most
people
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's interest, that are the Louvre and Vatican
Museums
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. In 1980 the
number
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 of tourists going to the Louvre reached almost eight
million
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people
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. Even though there was a bit decline in 2000, the
number
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 grew to almost ten
million
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 in 2015.
On the other hand
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, Vatican
Museums
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 experienced a rapid growth of visitors. Starting from around five
million
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 in 1980, the
number
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 is remarkably rising to almost ten
million
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people
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 in 2015.
In contrast
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, the London Science
Museum
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 is the only
museum
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 that has a downwards. The
number
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 of visitors in 1980 reached four
million
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people
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, but
then
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 in start decreased through the years until in 2015 it reached only two
million
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people
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, which is the lowest amongst the other
museums
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. Meanwhile, Shenzhen
Museum
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 remains steady for tourists, it started about four
million
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 in 1980 and still has the same amount in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museums, museum, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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