There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports center that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports center. In your letter: • Describe what the problem with the changing rooms is • Say what happened the last times you complained • Explain what you want the manager to do
Dear Sir,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am a member of the sports center
and using Change the spelling
centre
this
facility for the last
three years. I am writing this
letter to express my dissatisfaction with the water heating systems installed in the men's changing room of the facility as it is
not working for the past Verb problem
has
one
week. Owing to Correct pronoun usage
apply
it
, members are using cold water to take Correct pronoun usage
this
shower
.
I complained about it Fix the agreement mistake
showers
last
month also
, because then
also
it suddenly stopped working. Rephrase
apply
Then
a technician visited the facility and checked the system thoroughly and repaired it, but he advised to replace it with a new one. However
, nothing was done to buy a new heating equipment
, because it started working normally after the repair job.
I would urge you to kindly purchase Remove the article
new heating equipment
a piece of new heating equipment
new
heating systemCorrect article usage
a new
,
because Remove the comma
apply
winter
season is going on and it becomes difficult to use cold water for bathing. I hope you will look into the matter and take Correct article usage
the winter
necessary
steps to resolve the issue. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Jatinder.Correct article usage
the necessary
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task achievement
Your letter clearly communicated the problem, past attempts to resolve it, and a call to action. Ensure to include more specific details about how the issue affects you personally to enhance engagement.
coherence cohesion
Try to connect ideas with linking words slightly more, for smooth transitions. However, the logical flow of the letter is already quite commendable.
complete response
The letter effectively addresses all necessary points: the issue, past complaints, and the desired action.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, fitting for a letter to a manager.
greeting and closing
The structure of the letter, including a proper greeting and closing, conforms to a formal letter layout.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite