The graphs below show three exports from South East Asia and the four sources of revenue for 1970 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show three exports from South East Asia and the four sources of revenue for 1970 and 1995.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs illustrate the
exports
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of three categories from Southeast Asia between 1970 and 1995,
as well as
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the sources of
revenue
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for the region in 1970 and 1995. Manufactured products became the dominant export over the period,
while
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timber experienced a significant decline. In the first graph, the export of manufactured products
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dramatically from approximately 10% in 1970 to over 40% in 1995, showing consistent growth throughout the period.
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, timber
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declined sharply from around 35% in 1970 to below 5% in 1995.
Exports
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of other raw materials fluctuated slightly but remained relatively stable, ending at roughly 20%. The pie charts highlight changes in the sources of
revenue
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. In 1970, domestic
revenue
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accounted for the largest share at 33%, followed by
exports
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(29%) and tourism (27%). By 1995, tourism had grown significantly to 54% of
revenue
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,
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domestic
revenue
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dropped to 21%, and
exports
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decreased to 12%.
Revenue
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from other sources increased marginally, from 11% to 13%. In summary,
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manufactured goods emerged as the key export, the region’s economy became increasingly reliant on tourism as a major
revenue
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source.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, revenue with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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