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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate the percentage variation in house prices in New York, Tokyo,
London
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, Madrid, and
Frankfurt
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 between 1990 and 2002, and compare them with the average home costs in 1989.
Overall
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, it is evident that except for
Frankfurt
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, the difference in house values in all given cities significantly increased in 2002.
London
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 had the highest variation over the period;
whereas
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, the average price for buying a home in
Frankfurt
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 decreased in 2002. From 1990 to 1995,
London
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 and Tokyo had the lowest average accommodation prices at around below -5%.
However
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,
London
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 jumped massively to over 10% between 1996-2002, the highest percentage shift in the average house costs,
while
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 Tokyo had a slight rise to around -5% in 2002. New York started the period at -5% and rose substantially to approximately 5% in 2002.
Additionally
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, Madrid had the second biggest
change
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 in 1990 at around over a 0%
change
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 and increased to slightly below 5%.
Frankfurt
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 began with approximately a 3%
change
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 in 1990, the biggest number in any other country;
however
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,
this
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 declined to slightly above a 0%
change
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, frankfurt, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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