Many students finish high school and want to go and study in another country. This is something that is very common. Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying in another count
The world today is very different and that includes education. Today, many students want to leave their
country
and study
abroad. This
is done by many students from many countries. This
essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of studying in another country
.
Nowadays, There
are many advantages Fix capitalization
there
about
Change preposition
to studying
study
Change preposition
in anther
anther
Correct your spelling
another
your
Correct pronoun usage
apply
country
. Firstly
, study
in a new countries
some uk it Correct the article-noun agreement
new countries
a new country
is have
old building Change the verb form
has
place
. Can visiting tradition place
can you very happy to see that . Old building
can walk to enjoy of nice wither and Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
aceept
fresh air Correct your spelling
accept
out side
to be Correct your spelling
outside
fan
. Add an article
a fan
Secondly
, There are have
Unnecessary verb
apply
school
at a high level . Fix the agreement mistake
schools
For
example
some teachers Add a comma
example,
have
Correct pronoun usage
who have
master
and Ph.D. can add more information . Change noun form
master's
Place
Correct article usage
The place
of
students stay Change preposition
apply
it
is very nice because building quality to sheering and talking about Correct pronoun usage
apply
any things
about Correct your spelling
anything
study
. Finally
, study
another country
it is very importance
to add Replace the word
important
friends
.Such
as can know new cultural
when Replace the word
cultures
talk
with new Change the verb form
talking
friends
from all over the world . Some friends
can accept new information about place
for him to Add an article
a place
the place
can
visit Verb problem
apply
place
with family and Add an article
a place
the place
friends
and learn new
language .
Add an article
a new
On the other hand
, there are many disadvantages study
Wrong verb form
to studying
out side
your Correct your spelling
outside
country
. firstly
, over studiens
have new problems . Correct your spelling
studies
students
However
stay outside home maybe there or Add a comma
However,
fore
years Correct your spelling
for
far
your family and Correct your spelling
for
country
they feel missing your family and friends
. Many people have problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
how can cook
food and Wrong verb form
cooking
clean
Wrong verb form
cleaning
the
clothes it is Change the word
their
anew
problem . Correct your spelling
a new
secondly
, study
outside Wrong verb form
studying
country
Add an article
the country
it
is very expensive . Because single room Correct pronoun usage
apply
need
many between stay with family in your room free . Change the verb form
needs
Although
restaurant in the big cities it is very expensive ratio for they
.Correct pronoun usage
their
finally
Importance cause
Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
disadvantage
Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
study
out
Change preposition
outside
side
mother Correct your spelling
the
country
language . lessen new words about new language
Fix the agreement mistake
languages
of
all over the world . That can Change preposition
apply
make
Verb problem
cause
problem
because Fix the agreement mistake
problems
not have
Verb problem
there is no
any
way to Correct determiner usage
no
communication
often new people Replace the word
communicate
comes
from other countries
In conclusion, it is very easy to see that there are many advantages to go and Correct subject-verb agreement
come
study
in another country
. However
, it must be said that there are also
some disadvantages in
doing Change preposition
to
this
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