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The charts below show the main reasons why students chose a particular university in the UK, in 1997 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons why students chose a particular university in the UK, in 1997 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart displays the primary reasons
of
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why students
picks
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 a specific college in
Briten
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Britain
, between 1997 and 2007.
Overall
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, it is clear to say that students
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 less about sport and social activities,
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 they prefer
benig
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being
 close to their parents,
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. they
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rely
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 less on resources than before. In terms of social activities, in 1997 the
propotion
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proportion
 was 19%,
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. in 2007
this
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 value
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dropped
stongly
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strongly
 13% less than in the past.
on the other hand
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, Students in 1997
are
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 not
foucsing
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focusing
 on picking a
univirsity
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university
that
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is
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was
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 near to their home,
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. the
percent
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 was 10% but in 2007 it increased
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to 22%.
According to
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shown
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, in 1997
quality
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the quality
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 of teaching was approximately 15% but
then
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 in
2007
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2007,
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 it elevated slightly above that 3% higher.
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Furthermore
, In 1997
quality
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the quality
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 of resources was about 21%.
Nevertheless
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, in 2007
this
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 number went down to 17%
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