Life has become much more stressfull compared to our parent’s generation.As a result stress related illnesses are increasing around the world.Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear logical structure. Consider organizing your points paragraphs, each focusing on a different aspect of stress and solutions.
Task Achievement
Provide specific examples to support the points mentioned in your essay, such as how stress impacts individuals around the world.
Task Achievement
Try to maintain clarity in your ideas by using simple sentence structures. This will help readers better understand your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your arguments.
Task Achievement
You have addressed the various problems and causes of increased stress in the modern world.
Fully explain your ideas
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