Life has become much more stressfull compared to our parent’s generation.As a result stress related illnesses are increasing around the world.Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

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Ensure your essay has a clear logical structure. Consider organizing your points paragraphs, each focusing on a different aspect of stress and solutions.

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Provide specific examples to support the points mentioned in your essay, such as how stress impacts individuals around the world.

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Try to maintain clarity in your ideas by using simple sentence structures. This will help readers better understand your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your arguments.

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You have addressed the various problems and causes of increased stress in the modern world.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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