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The graphs below the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the different modes of transport ,used to travel to and one European city in 1960 ,1980 and 2000. Let me begin by describing the bus transport mode,we will see there are fluctuations in travellers percentage in 1960 more than 15 %.
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,there was an increase in 1980 by around 25 %,Meanwhile
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bus
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 decreased in 2000. In my opinion, the bus
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 decreased because the travellers prefer to
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 the car.
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, we can see a huge increasing around 40 %. Another trend can be observed in the
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 of the bike and feet in 1960 more than cars and buses. I think
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 increase was
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 people's lack of knowledge about buses and cars . Compared to the year 2000 ,their
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 has decreased because they tend to
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 modern vehicles. The main thing that can be noticed here is that car transport
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominance
  • corresponding decline
  • surge
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental awareness
  • resurgence
  • primary modes of transport
  • decades
  • shift in transport modes
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