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The table shows the number of international visitors arrivals came to nine different countries and the percentage changes between 2009 and 2010.

The table shows the number of international visitors arrivals came to nine different countries and the percentage changes between 2009 and 2010.
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The table gives information about the tourists who arrived in eight leading
countries
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 in two years and the changes .
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, the listed
countries
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 are France, the US, Spain, the UK, Italy, Turkey, China, Germany, and Hong Kong. Of all,
Honk
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Hong
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 Kong was the only one to experience a decline,
whereas
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 other
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 had marginal to considerable increases, except for France which remained consistent throughout the given timeframe. In both years, France was by far the most visited destination, with 76
million
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 visitors. The US came next at 66
million
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 tourists in 2009 and 67
million
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 in 2010, recording a 1.5% rise.
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, Spain witnessed
growth
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the growth
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 of 1
million
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travelers
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travellers
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, from 55 to 56
million
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 arrivals, increasing by 1.8%. Some other small changes were recorded in the UK and Italy, with their increases making up 3.6% and 2.3% respectively.
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, Turkey, China, and Germany were the
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 where global
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 influx surged over the period. In Turkey, there was a 33% upward trend, growing from its initial 33
million
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 to 45
million
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 tourists. In terms of arrival figures in China, the country welcomed 22
million
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 visitors, which
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 had a leap to 34
million
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, reflecting a 55% improvement. Meanwhile, Germany’s statistics more than doubled, with a 109% increase, from 11
million
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 in 2009 to 23
million
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 in 2010. The
last
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 country in the table was Hong Kong, the figures of which dropped diminutively by 11%, observing a decline to 9
million
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 foreigners from 2009’s 10
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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