Some cities have vehicle free days where private cars, trucks, and motorcycles are banned in city centers. Only bus, bicycle, and taxis are permitted in the city center. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?

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vehicle free
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days where personal cars,trucks, and motorcycles are prohibited in the heart of the city.Only
bus
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buses
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,
bycle
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bicycle
cycle
and taxis are allowed. I assume that
pros
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the pros
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outweigh the cons of
such
actions and I give the main reasons as well.
To begin
with, in society , the extent of
traffic
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of
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vehicle
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is significantly increasing
as a result
traffic
jams are
being occurred
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,
noise
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and noise
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pollution
of
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it
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is interrupting citizens
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are living in central places.People prefer using their
transportations
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transportation
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like motorcycles and bicycles in order to go to work office and
schools
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school
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.
Such
kinds of devices are eco-friendly and practical for
environment
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the environment
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. It brings profit financially and without greenhouse gas.
On the contrary
, when the government ban local
transportations
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transportation
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,the
traffic
jams are reduced and the government invest less foundation of citizens.More people spend less money and do not pay extra fees. They translate their lifestyle
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to their eco-friendly devices including bikes and motorcycles. Human beings save more money and spend it
for
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their other expenses
as a result
they have well-fare in families. There are reduced numbers of collisions
in
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highways between automobiles. By way of conclusion, prohibiting private cycles and motorbikes has a lot of advantages for personal finance but not for society.
Pros
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The pros
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of social
transportations
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transportation
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outweigh the personal ones.There are
less
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disasters and
traffic
jams.
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