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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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provide
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informations
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 regarding the
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predictions
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 change in the
rate
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 of the population of the people aged 65 and above in three different countries.
overall
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, the
predictions
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 took place in
Canada
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, Germany and the
UK
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.
the
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rate
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 of
the
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people aged 65 and above in these countries
are
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rising
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 in general throughout the years 1988, 2000 and 2030.
Canada
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is seems
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 to have
the
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 higher
rate
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 of
these
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 group of
population
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the population
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,
while
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 the
UK
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is
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has
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the
lowst
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lowest
in
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percentage. the
UK
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 percentage of change in the years1988 and 2000
seem
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 to be steady with
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rate
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rates
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 of 14.23 and 14.89 respectively.
on the other hand
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,
Canada
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's percentage was 16.32 in 1988,
however
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, it rose
up
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to 20.67 by the year
of
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2000.
Gemany
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Germany
 rates of
predictions
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 change were the highest among the other countries in all of the time rivals,
started
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 with a
perdiction
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prediction
production
rate
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 of 20.45 until it
rached
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reached
 the
percent
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per cent
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 of 25.32 in 2000.
while
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Canada
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,
Gemany
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Germany
 and the
UK
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 will end up in 2030
according to
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 the
predictions
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 to have 26.35, 30.42 and 20.35 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words predictions, rate, canada, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • population aged 65 and above
  • current figures
  • evident trends
  • patterns
  • increases
  • decreases
  • rates of change
  • growth rate
  • predictions
  • future changes
  • significant shifts
  • figures
  • summarize
  • comparison
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