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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The road near your house is completely unsuitable for traffic. Write a letter to your local council. In your letter: • Introduce yourself; • Explain what the problem is; • Tell what would you like to be done. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ....,

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Dear
sir
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/Mam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
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 to express my disappointment regarding traffic near to my home. My name is Darsh Patel. I have been living in
this
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 area
from
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for
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last
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the last
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 ten years. My house number is A108 which is located on the right corner of the
street
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.
Initially
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, I would like to bring your attention to the problem which is
causing
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 by the vehicles.
Firstly
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, because of the traffic, I and my family members were
gets
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getting
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 irritated by the
noice
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noise
 of
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the horn
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horn
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.
Secondly
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, we are not feeling well in order to
saftey
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safety
, as anyone can
moving
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 from my home
wih
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with
 more speed than usual.
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,
this
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treet
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street
 is
also
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 not the main
street
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,
still
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 everyone is using
this
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street
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.
Therefore
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, I kindly request you to
do
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make
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 some changes
such
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impose
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imposing
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 rules for
restriction
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the restriction
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 of speed
,
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apply
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 and
ask
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asking
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 them to use
main
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the main
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 road
instead
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 of the side
street
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. I trust you will take my concerns seriously, and I look forward to your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Darsh Patel
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, add more specific details about how the traffic issue affects the community at large and mention any previous attempts to contact the council or seek resolutions.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, improve sentence variety and connect paragraphs more smoothly with linking words or phrases.
task achievement
The letter covers all parts of the prompt effectively and provides a clear request to the council.
coherence cohesion
Your structure is well-organized, clearly introducing yourself, describing the problem, and suggesting solutions.
task achievement
The language used is polite and appropriate for writing to a local council, displaying a respectful and formal tone.
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