Some people believe that technology is making it easier for people to live in cities, while others think it is making life more complicated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Coherence & Cohesion

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that technology is making it easier for people to live in cities, while others think it is making life more complicated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some experts believe that school it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primaryrather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some parents believe that extra private lesson outside school hours, where students work alone with a teach, can help them do better at school. Others disagree. What are the advantages and disadvantages of private tuition? And give your opinion.