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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Nowadays many nations and their residents are starting to be interested in
research
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 and study about the traditional
history
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 of accommodation where they still live.Before most people neglected
history
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 and culture. The past century
was
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rapidly developed an industrial sector and most people
move
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 to new
buildings
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 for living,
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 a lifestyle rapidly changed
such
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 as
,
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 urbanism and globalism.
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 a few countries could stay to keep old architectural
buildings
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 from being ancient.
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 city is Edinburgh, which is the capital city of Scotland in the United Kingdom. There are so many historical
buildings
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, castles and surprisingly there are still live residences now that are called modern Athen. With
this
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 in mind, people have been living in many kinds of
buildings
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 and apartments that were built just twenty and ten years ago. Human
behavior
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 is very curious, so they are bored
from
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 all new things,
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 as their accommodation. And they are fascinating about their origin or where I am from.
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,
In
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Mongolia has the most famous original nomadic shelter called
yurt
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a yurt
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. Almost a hundred years ago we didn't use that, nowadays many individuals and tourists are re-organised and living in
yurt
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yurts
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 now. The more developed society is, the more study and
research
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 there is. I liked that modern inhabitants can investigate the old origin themselves.In
this
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time
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 there are many ways to
research
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history
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, especially, despite online
research
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 we should be able to travel physically to every countryside. In summary, I believe more and more individuals
are
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compelling
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the compelling
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history
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 of living areas from
time
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 to
time
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. because it depends on free
time
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 for rapid development.

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task response
The essay provides a general response to the task by discussing reasons why people are interested in the history of buildings they live in and how they can research this. However, the points could be more thoroughly explored with deeper explanations.
task response
The ideas in the essay are mostly clear, although in some areas they are not fully developed or supported with examples. Try to provide additional detail or examples to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea or theme and use more varied linking words or phrases between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Some arguments in the essay need stronger support or evidence. Consider adding more specific examples or details to back up the main points.
coherence cohesion
The essay opens with a clear introduction and sets up the topic well for discussion.
task response
The essay includes interesting examples, such as the development of Edinburgh and the mention of yurts in Mongolia, which add uniqueness to the response.
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