In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?
Nowadays many nations and their residents are starting to be interested in
research
and study about the traditional history
of accommodation where they still live.Before most people neglected history
and culture.
The past century was
rapidly developed an industrial sector and most people Unnecessary verb
apply
move
to new Wrong verb form
moved
buildings
for living, Therefore
a lifestyle rapidly changed such
as,
urbanism and globalism. Remove the comma
apply
Whereas
a few countries could stay to keep old architectural buildings
from being ancient.For
example
city is Edinburgh, which is the capital city of Scotland in the United Kingdom. There are so many historical Add a comma
example,
buildings
, castles and surprisingly there are still live residences now that are called modern Athen.
With this
in mind, people have been living in many kinds of buildings
and apartments that were built just twenty and ten years ago. Human behavior
is very curious, so they are bored Change the spelling
behaviour
from
all new things, Change preposition
with
such
as their accommodation. And they are fascinating about their origin or where I am from.For instance
, In
Mongolia has the most famous original nomadic shelter called Change preposition
apply
yurt
. Almost a hundred years ago we didn't use that, nowadays many individuals and tourists are re-organised and living in Add an article
a yurt
yurt
now.
The more developed society is, the more study and Fix the agreement mistake
yurts
research
there is. I liked that modern inhabitants can investigate the old origin themselves.In this
time
there are many ways to research
history
, especially, despite online research
we should be able to travel physically to every countryside.
In summary, I believe more and more individuals are
Verb problem
have
compelling
Add an article
the compelling
a compelling
history
of living areas from time
to time
. because it depends on free time
for rapid development.Submitted by nbogey777 on
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task response
The essay provides a general response to the task by discussing reasons why people are interested in the history of buildings they live in and how they can research this. However, the points could be more thoroughly explored with deeper explanations.
task response
The ideas in the essay are mostly clear, although in some areas they are not fully developed or supported with examples. Try to provide additional detail or examples to enhance clarity.
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coherence cohesion
The essay opens with a clear introduction and sets up the topic well for discussion.
task response
The essay includes interesting examples, such as the development of Edinburgh and the mention of yurts in Mongolia, which add uniqueness to the response.
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