The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.

The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.
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The graph illustrates the
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results
of a survey that quistioned 6800
adults
from Scotland strated from 16 years old and over whether
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they
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took part in some
cultral
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cultural
activities
such
as dancing, singing, playing
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instruments and acting in the
last
year.
Overall
, teenagers
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are
more
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these kind
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of activities rather than older people. 45-74
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prefer doing
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activities. 16-24 people like to do any visual arts
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others.
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, For teenagers, any
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performance
section was approximately 35% which
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the highest proportion among all,
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any visual arts section it got 30%
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was the second highest
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percentage
.
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based's value was 10% in was the lowest percentage for teenagers. In terms of
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they had 6% it's almost equally to older
adults
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participate
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with 5%. Despite
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45-74 years old.
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