The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie and bar graphs
shows
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show
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the information on the location and types of
dance
classes young people in a town in Australia.
Overall
, most of the
student
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students
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practice
in private studios with the number of
student
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students
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is vary
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varies
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in each type of
classes
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class
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. It can be seen that nearly half of the young individuals choose to
practice
in
a private studios
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a private studio
private studios
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. School halls (after-school) become the second
popular
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most popular
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places to do the
dance
classes,
whereas
community halls & others hold a third position.
In contrast
, college-based studios become the least popular place to
practice
with only 10%
students
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of students
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practice in
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practising
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there.
Furthermore
, 600 kids under 11 years old
choose
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chose
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ballet as their main type of
dance
. Following on the second place is tap
dance
with over 450 kids, whilst modern
dance
become the
last
with only 300
students
.
However
, modern
dance
become
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became
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the
popular
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most popular
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class
in
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among
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people
age
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aged
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11 to 16 with over 500
students
, following tap
dance
with around 400
students
, and ballet class
become
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became
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the least with 300
students
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, practice, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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