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In the past photographs were real on people and places. Nowadays with modern technologies, you can not trust the pictures. Do you think is it a positive or negative development?

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It is obviously true that
pictures
 in the past would indicate the real face of humans and areas. In recent times, likely
applying
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 of some contemporary
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software
on
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to
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pictures
 might cause the whole details of
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the image
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would
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not
be
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 trusted.
Although
 these kinds of modifications are changing some realities,
but
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I firmly believe accessing these new graphic
softwares
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software
are
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 beneficial and should be supposed as positive effects. On the one side, if we merely want to describe some negative effects of picture adjustment, it might be abusing
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 to create some fake evidence for
few
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 organizations.
For instance
, if someone
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 to make a fake picture to prove their presence somewhere in order to mislead
police
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the police
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 department
among
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about
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 a criminal subject.
Moreover
, a dishonest student who generates a fake
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certificate
 by use of
graphics
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 program might be another example
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However
, the realities would be revealed
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 the middle or ultimate parts of
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above mentioned
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 examples. Apparently, police officers and academic members are quite smart to realize the
genuin
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genuine
 part of the cases. On the other side, if we focus on some ranges of beneficiaries which would be created in software modifying of
pictures
 we should definitely confirm them as positive development.
For example
, life partners who are spending
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 somewhere
they
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are quite interested
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pictures
 and highly likely might not make all of them perfect,
accordingly
, they merely use the technology and modify what they
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 and make them memorable for
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 whole life. In some other cases, in criminal investigation by police,
the
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zooming in
some
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 zones of an image is very important to find out something quite significant which these contemporary technologies help us achieve
it
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and
this
 can be another aspect of advantages.
To conclude
, we can consider that beneficiaries of modern technology are fairly and comprehensively more likely drawbacks and I firmly believe we have to concentrate
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 the positive applications of new
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software
 and merely control, oversee and verify some other cases which can
raely
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rarely
revealed
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 as drawbacks and disadvantages.
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coherence cohesion
Try to improve the logic flow between sentences and paragraphs. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that relates to your thesis.
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Use more specific examples to illustrate your points. This will demonstrate the relevance and applicability of your arguments.
coherence cohesion
You provide a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames the essay well.
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You address both the positives and negatives, showing a balanced perspective on the issue.
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