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percentages of different types of recycling weast in one city from 1992 to 2002

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Introduction
The bar chart
domenstrate
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demonstrates
demonstrate
 the percentages of different kinds of recycling house items in one city from 1992 to 2002.
Body paragraph 1
In 1992 there
was
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were
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a signifcant
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signifcant incrases
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significant increase
 in
the
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paper
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wast
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waste
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 by more than 20% in
compasion
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comparison
compassion
 with the other items.
Body paragraph 2
For
glass
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 and
cans
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 recycling ,the
persentages
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percentage
 are
rised togather
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raised together
 until
reached
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reaches
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 15-16%. the least items
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used and
recyclied
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recycled
 was plastic which did not
excesed
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exceed
 10%.
Body paragraph 3
In 1997 the ratio of
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recycled waste nearly
dubled
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doubled
 from 1992. for
paper
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 waste the
percentage
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incresed
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increased
 to 33% ,
follwed
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followed
 by
the
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glass
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that
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which
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 reached 25%. the
percentage
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 of
the
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recycled plastic slightly
rised
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raised
risen
rose
 by 2%
from
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since
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 1992.
Body paragraph 4
Linking Words
However
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However,
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 the
propotion
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proportion
 of recycled cans drop
modeatly
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modestly
moderately
 by 13%.
Body paragraph 5
In 2002 , there
is
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was
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 dramatic growth in the
percentage
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 of
glass
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 and
paper
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 recycling in
compasion
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comparison
compassion
 with the other years.
Body paragraph 6
The recycled
glass
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percentage
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 was around 50%,
while
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paper
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 was nearly less than 40%.
Body paragraph 7
Recycled
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The recycled
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 cans ratio
cosiderably
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considerably
rised
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risen
 in
compare
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 with 1997 by more than half.
Conclusion
The chart did not show
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a diffreance
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diffreance
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differences
difference
 in the
percentage
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 of recycled plastic in
constarct
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contrast
with
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to
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 1997.

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coherence cohesion
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The essay addresses the main features of the bar chart and outlines the trends over time.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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