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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 bar chart illustrates the marriage and divorce rates
of
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USA
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the USA
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in
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 1970 to 2000. It is measured in
millions
. The other
chrat showes
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chart shows
 to report of
adults
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adult
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americans
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Americans
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 marital status which is
measured
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a measured
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 percentage.
Overall
, over the time period
marriages
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marriage
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rate
was
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increased
than
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more than
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 the
divorces
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divorce
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rate
.
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,
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divorces plateaued in the under 1.5
millions
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million
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.
According to
 the other chart, divorces
were
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declined steadily
1970
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from 1970
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than
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to
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the
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2000.
divorce
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the divorce
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rate
was remain
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remained
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 constant in 1970 and 2000 which was 01
millions
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million
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.
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,
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 people were marriages prefer gradually
discreasing
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decreasing
increasing
 1990 and 2000.But on the other side
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the marriages
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marriages
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marriage
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rate
 was 1970,1980 get the same value.It was approximately 2.5
millions
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million
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. Never married people percentage was 15% in 1970 ,in 2000 it was
approxiamately
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approximately
 20%.Married individuals had
highest
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the highest
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 proportion
it was
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 reaching a peak of 70%.
Widowed
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The widowed
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 and divorced percentage was
lowest
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the lowest
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 which is below 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marriage rate
  • divorce rate
  • marital status
  • adult Americans
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • nadir
  • comparisons
  • notable
  • patterns
  • factors
  • social factors
  • distribution
  • significant differences
  • anomalies
  • speculate
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