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The chart shows the hours per week spent watching TV by gender and by age group in 2001 in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the hours per week spent watching TV by gender and by age group in 2001 in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the different types of
age
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group
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groups
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spent
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that spent
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thier
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their
time
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on
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apply
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watching
TV
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 in Australia in 2001.
Male
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Males
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 and
female
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females
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 both
these
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age
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category
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categories
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 mentioned under 15 to over 55
age
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group
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.
Overall
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,
female
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females
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 were the majority
group
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of
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apply
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spending
time
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 on
TV
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 and male
were
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dropped slightly to prefer
watch
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watching
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TV
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.
according to
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this
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, under 15
age
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group
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 was the most
perfer
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prefer
 to watch television
while
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 38-45 aged people were the minority of
this
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 chart. Under 15 kids
approxiamately
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approximately
 25
hours
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 spent to
tv
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.It was declined
stadily
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steadily
 10
hours
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 of 36-45 aged people. Over 55 adults were willing to watch
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tv
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TV
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 which was
got
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20
hours
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.
Male
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The male
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 spent
time
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 with
TV
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 gradually declined all
of
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ages
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the ages
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. But 15-25 youngers over 55 adults remained constant
thier
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their
time
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. male 18
hours
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 spent and women spent 20
hours
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 both
this
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group
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. 48-55 aged individuals
approxiamately
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approximately
 spent 18
hours
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 of
TV
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, time, tv, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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