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The chart shows the hours per week spent watching TV by gender and by age group in 2001 in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the hours per week spent watching TV by gender and by age group in 2001 in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the different types of
age
group
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groups
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spent
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that spent
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thier
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their
time
on
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apply
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watching
TV
 in Australia in 2001.
Male
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Males
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 and
female
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females
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 both
these
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age
category
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categories
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 mentioned under 15 to over 55
age
group
.
Overall
,
female
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females
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 were the majority
group
of
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spending
time
 on
TV
 and male
were
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dropped slightly to prefer
watch
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watching
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TV
.
according to
this
, under 15
age
group
 was the most
perfer
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prefer
 to watch television
while
 38-45 aged people were the minority of
this
 chart. Under 15 kids
approxiamately
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approximately
 25
hours
 spent to
tv
.It was declined
stadily
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steadily
 10
hours
 of 36-45 aged people. Over 55 adults were willing to watch
tv
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TV
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 which was
got
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20
hours
.
Male
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The male
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 spent
time
 with
TV
 gradually declined all
of
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ages
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the ages
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. But 15-25 youngers over 55 adults remained constant
thier
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their
time
. male 18
hours
 spent and women spent 20
hours
 both
this
group
. 48-55 aged individuals
approxiamately
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approximately
 spent 18
hours
 of
TV
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, time, tv, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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