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Band 3.5

Even though organic fruits and vegetables are more expensive than conventional fruits and vegetables, they are worth the extra cost. Do you agree or disagree?

#fruits #vegetables #cost
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while
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 there is a huge difference between conventional and organic
fruits
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 in price, there are many people who think it
worth
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is worth
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 that
exrta
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extra
cost
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. regarding that matter I disagree with whoever
say
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says
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 it
woth
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worth
with
 the extra
cost
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.
in
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this
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 essay, I
would
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will
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 mention some of the
reasones
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reasons
the
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that
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 led me to
this
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 conclusion. as far
i
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I
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 know there are no
differernces
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differences
 between organic and
coventional
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conventional
fruits
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. using a special method to plant these
fruit
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 does not make
it
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them
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 rich and
valueble
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valuable
 with
vitamens
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vitamins
.
for example
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, the nutrition of an organic apple
do
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does
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 not quite
differe
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different
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than
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that
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a
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of a
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conventional apple.
that is
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 one of the reasons I would say it
does
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is
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 not worth the extra
cost
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 it takes for me to
affoard
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afford
 an organic apple
nor
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or
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 any other type of organic fruit over a conventional one. the other reason is, paying an extra
cost
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 for an organic fruit for higher
nutristion
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nutrition
nutritional
 value would be
meaningles
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meaningful
, where a person can get those extra value
with
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in
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cheaper
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a cheaper
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 and more effective way.
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, rather than poes an organic
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fruits
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fruit
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 burden, there are
multivitamens
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multivitamins
 which cause the same effect with an
insatant
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instant
 result. that
another
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is another
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 reason
making
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why making
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the
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apply
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organic
fruits
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a
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is a
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waste of money, even if
it
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they
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 do really matter and
has
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have
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 a real
nutristion
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nutrition
nutritional
 value.
to conclude
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, I
strongely
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strongly
 disagree with that concept. organic
fruits
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 have no difference
than
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from
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 conventional
fruits
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. even if it does there are other options
that
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is
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are
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 cheaper and more effective
such
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as multivitamens
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multivitamens
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multivitamins
.
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Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear stance on the topic, indicating disagreement with the notion that organic fruits and vegetables are worth the extra cost.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, helping to frame the argument effectively.

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