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The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows who Americans spend their time with, by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram displays the information about the US Citizens spend their
time
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 based on many
hours
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 from 20 to over 80
years
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 old.
Overall
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, the majority of people spend their
time
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 alone and the lowest ratio
at the end
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 of the period is with
coworkers
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. At the early age from 20 to 30
years
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 old, the
time
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 with their family fell off significantly from 4
hours
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 to nearly 1 hour and after that followed by friends.
On the other hand
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,
coworkers
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, partners, children and alone are starting to increase gradually, where personal
time
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 started with the biggest in over 3
hours
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. In the period 30 to 40
years
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 old, alone and children sides share the same values at approximately 4
hours
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.
Nevertheless
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, partners and
coworkers
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 had stagnant stages
while
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 taking
time
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 with family and friends being the smallest.
However
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, at the stage of 50
years
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 old, the moment with children and
coworkers
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 slowly decreased. In the end, living alone had the biggest
hours
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 at 8
hours
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while
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 the other categories only enjoyed by each other not over than 3
hours
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours, years, coworkers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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