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Band 5.5

Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice – Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate – Express your enthusiasm for music

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Dear Sir, I am
writiing
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writing
this
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 letter to apply for the guitarist position in your
music
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 band. Here is the summary of my introduction. To
commece
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commence
, I play guitar in bars and
in
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 local events.
In addition
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, I have taken
the
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music
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 classes
from
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 St Claire College. I recently read in the newspaper about your
music
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 band and you are looking for a new guitarist.
Apart from
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this
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, I have gained more than four years of experience
as
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apply
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a
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apply
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using
this
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 instrument.
Moreover
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, I have
got
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lot
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a lot
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 of
achievments
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achievements
, especially in
the
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competitions. I am one of the
top ranked
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instrtrument
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instrument
 players in my city.
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, I have
offically
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officially
 worked as a background guitar artist in
famous
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the famous
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 movie Half Girlfriend.
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, Since my
childhood
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childhood,
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 I have had only
dream
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a dream
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to be
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of being
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 a musician for which I took
music
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 lessons from
intructors
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instructors
 and learned
each
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about each and every chord quickly. I know a lot of songs with their lyrics and chords. As
considering
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consider
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this
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 experience, I Believe by considering
this
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, I am suitable for
this
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 position. I will be
waiting
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looking
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 forward to your response. Regards, Manpreet Singh
Submitted by Manpreet Singh on

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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, clear idea to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Revise to avoid small errors in spelling and tense consistency for improved accuracy.
task achievement
The letter successfully covers all required points: introduction, credentials, and enthusiasm for music.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitable and professional, showing genuine enthusiasm for the role.
greeting and closing
A clear opening and closing structure make the letter easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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