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The bar chart shows the percentage of young people in higher education in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of young people in higher education in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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In 2000, the
percentage
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 of young people in higher
education
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 was relatively low, with only 30% enrolled.
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 figure saw a significant rise by 2005, reaching approximately 40%. The upward trend continued, and by 2010, the
percentage
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 had increased
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 to around 50%.
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 indicates a steady growth in the number of young individuals choosing to pursue higher
education
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. When comparing the years, the most substantial increase occurred between 2005 and 2010,
where
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when
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 the
percentage
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 rose by 10%.
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 suggests that higher
education
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 became increasingly accessible or desirable during
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 period.
In contrast
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, the growth from 2000 to 2005 was more gradual, with only a 10% increase. In conclusion, the bar chart highlights a clear upward trend in the
percentage
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 of young people in higher
education
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 from 2000 to 2010, reflecting a growing emphasis on the importance of higher
education
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 among the youth.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • notable
  • significant
  • comparison
  • higher education
  • young people
  • year-on-year
  • socio-economic factors
  • government policy
  • economic conditions
  • cultural attitudes
  • globalization
  • educational reforms
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