Large companies have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems could this cause? What could encourage people to buy more local products?

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One of the widely discussed
phenomenons
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nowadays is the impact of money spent on advertising and marketing by big
companies
which
encourages
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consumers
prefering
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preferring
their
pruducts
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products
over others.
While
this
trend can lead to several problems, certain precautions can be taken to solve them. It can be argued that large
companies
have more budget to spend on promotion which results in reduced
market
share and profit margins for the local businesses.
Firstly
,most of the time local
market
players can not allocate
sufficient
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budget
on
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their advertising strategy
due to
lack
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a lack
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of financial resources.
Therefore
,they can not promote their
products
widely,
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and make
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enough sales and profit to grow
further
.
Secondly
,large
companies
are usually multinational
companies
and with more money spent on mass communication, more consumers are lured to their
products
rather than local producers in
the
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different industries
such
as food, fashion, entertainment and more.
Hence
, it can pose a threat
on
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cultural
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the cultural
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identity of certain countries.
On the other hand
,
problems
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the problems
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discussed above can be minimized with the active role of government agencies.Those parties can impose certain limitations on the
market
share of large
companies
and severe regulations on their marketing activities which would help to reduce the gap between small and large enterprises regarding the use of
products
and services.
Additionally
,
with
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more financial resources from
government
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the government
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to some organizations
which
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actively enable SEM
business
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businesses
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to have more
precense
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presence
and share in the
market
.
For example
, there is one company in Azerbaijan called "AzPromo" which organizes many exhibitions and other events to help local businesses
to
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promote their
products
and
also
give the opportunity
to
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them
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apply
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to have a corner in worldwide sales events
such
as "Gulfood" held in Dubai every year.
To conclude
, large
companies
' marketing
capabilites
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capabilities
may threaten the presence of local and small businesses which can be regulated and minimized by the active support of government parties.
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Try to expand on points regarding cultural identity and its impacts with more depth.
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Cohesion
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