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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the graph by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Press Submit to send to your teacher. Press Help to see model answer.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the graph by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Press Submit to send to your teacher. Press Help to see model answer.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the Louvre,
Vatican
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 museums, London Science, and Shenzhen from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of people who visited the Louvre and
Vatican
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 art galleries increased over the
period
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of tourists who visited the London Science
Museum
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 declined.
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,
Vatican
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 museums had the highest increase in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 in 2015. Louvre had the biggest
number
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 of tourists in 1980, at around 8
million
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, and it rose slightly to below 10
million
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.
Vatican
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 Art Gallery started the
period
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 at below 4
million
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;
however
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,
this
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 had the wildest fluctuation, with a massive jump to approximately 8
million
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 in 2015, meeting Louver
Museum
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the
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 same
number
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 of
visitors
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. Meanwhile, the London Science
Museum
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 began with 4
million
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visitors
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,
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 and decreased significantly to half that amount in 2015, which was 2
million
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, the lowest
number
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 in any other
museum
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. Shenzhen
Museum
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 remained relatively steady at the same
number
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 of
visitors
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 throughout the
period
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, at around slightly less than 4
million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, vatican, period, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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