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the table highlights data on the number of travellers using three major British airports between 1998 and 2003. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table shows information
of
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about
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 people
how
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 used
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Britain's
Britian's
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Britain's
 three main airports for travelling in 5-
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 period between 1998 and 2003.
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, what stands out from the table is that
Gatwick
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 was the busiest airport,
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 the second place mostly was for Heathrow. In the
last
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year
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Gatwick
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 reached the highest
number
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 of
passengars
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passengers
. If we look at
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the details
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,
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Gatwick
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, the
number
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 of visitors started at 36.5
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million
millions
 in 1998 and it gradually increased
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 following 5 years until it
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 peak and the most crowded point during the whole period in 2003, reaching 69.3
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millions
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 of travellers.
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, in 2000 it was not as successful as Heathrow and took
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second place
by
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 44.4
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millions
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of
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visitors. As for Stansted, the
number
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 of people started at 17.3
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millions
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of
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travellers it saw a gradual growth each
year
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 until 2001,
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 it finished at 43.3
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people and levelled off the next 2 years.
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Heathrow's travellers, it was 27.2
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millions
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 in 1998, which meant that the airport was not nearly as busy as
Gatwick
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, and the
number
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 went up steadily until 2000, increasing to 48.2
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millions
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, which meant that it was the highest point totally for
this
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 airport
as well as
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 being the most crowded that
year
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. having gone up, the
number
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pople
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people
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travelld
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travelled
 there dropped sharply in 2001 and 2002 but improved steeply in 2003, rocketing to 45.6
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grammar
Work on using consistent tense throughout the essay to enhance clarity and cohesion.
content
Ensure all years are consistently referenced for clarity.
grammar
Refine sentence structures to avoid minor errors and improve fluency.
structure
Include a stronger conclusion to tie together the main comparisons and features discussed.
content
Good overall comparison of the three airports, highlighting their passenger trends clearly.
content
Effective use of specific figures to compare the data.
structure
Structured analysis with attention to the changes over time for each airport.

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