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The picture below shows how a hot balloon works. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The given chart illustrates the operation of a hot balloon.
Overall
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, a hot balloon is a flying object
that is
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 combined from a variety of smaller details making the two big parts
such
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 as a
parachute
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 and a
basket
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 with a burner. Looking at the
parachute
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, the top of the
parachute
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 is a
parachute
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 valve which is a self-sealing flap from which the hot
air
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 can escape at a controlled rate so the balloon can fly up because the hot
air
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 is light.
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, the
parachute
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 is made by merging many long strips of fibre panels called gores.
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the final detail is a skirt which is a small part that combines the
parachute
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 and the
basket
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 with some ropes. Regarding the
basket
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 and the burner, the burner is an object that burns the fuel which is a mix of propane with
air
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 and by
this
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, flame is created to make the hot
air
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.
Finally
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, a
basket
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 is an object where people can stand to fly.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider adding a brief conclusion to summarize your main points and reinforce the description of the hot air balloon's operation.
logical structure
Use transition words and phrases to enhance the flow between the sections about the parachute and the burner, making your description more cohesive.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate more specific examples or details, such as materials used or dimensions, to strengthen your completeness and illustrate your points further.
complete response
The essay clearly breaks down the components and their functions in the hot air balloon, helping readers understand the process.
logical structure
The information is well-structured, beginning with an overview followed by separate body paragraphs about the parachute and basket with burner.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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