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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
#requests #information #tourist #office #kingdom #january #june
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The line graph provides information on
aplication
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applications
, which were required at a tourist office in the UK during
five
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month
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five-month
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 period from
January
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 to June.
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, there was growth in two out of three modes of information transmission during
this
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 period, with the exception of the letter/email. The number of
request
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requests
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 made by telephone, which accounted for approximately 900 in
January
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, increased slightly to 1000 in both March and April and
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 rose significantly to 1600 by June, marking a notable upward trend. As
fir
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for
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 the figure
fir
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for
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 another component, which was called in person, it constituted roughly 450 in
January
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.
This
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 figure increased
consistenly
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consistently
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, equaling about 800 in the
avverage
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average
 timeframe, and
then
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 underwent a rapid surge to nearly 1900 by June. In terms of by letter/email,
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 the sum in
January
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 was close to 800, it declined
steadly
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steadily
 over the months, and the final count was about 400, representing a significant drop over the given period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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