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Band 3.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate how
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airport
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the airport
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 will look after redevelopment in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 year.
Overall
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, a comparison of the two
map
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maps
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 reveals that after
development
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development,
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 the
airport
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 will become larger and modern, with the addition of several
facilities
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such
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 as car hire, bag drop,
sky
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and sky
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 train. Currently, the
airport
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 has very basic
facilities
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. The
check in
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check-in
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is
in
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on
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 the western side of the
departures
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, and in the east and north
corner
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corners
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 of
it
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it,
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 there is a cafe. In
arrivals
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the arrivals
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section
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section,
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 there
is
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are
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 no
facilities
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. Above
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departures
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departures,
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 there is security and passport control
together with
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 customs. Beyond passport
control
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control,
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 there is the walkway with 8
gates
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 for planes, no additional
facilities
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 provided. After the redevelopment, the
airport
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 will experience
really
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a really
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 big upgrade. In
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departures
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departures,
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 the cafe will be
replaced
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relocated
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to
west
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the west
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 and south
corner
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corners
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,
check in
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check-in
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 will move to
opposite
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the opposite
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 side of its current location,
a
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and a
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bag drop will be constructed
to
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in
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northern
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the northern
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 corner of
departure
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the departure
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.
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area.
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While
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 arrivals will have a car hire near the entrance,
cafe
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a cafe
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also
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will also
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 going to be built
to
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on
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 the same side
like
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as
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departures
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. Beyond the security, some shops will be installed. The number of
gates
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 will increase significantly
and
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, and
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 in the centre of Y
shaped
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Y-shaped
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gates
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 will be built a sky train which makes more
convenience
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convenient
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 for people.
In contrast
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, the redevelopment will transform
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airport
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the airport
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 from simple
facilities
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 to
larger
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a larger
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 and more convenient place, offering more
gates
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 and transport services.

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task achievement
Provide a clearer introduction that outlines the main features you will compare.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more effectively to improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Make sure to include comparisons between the current airport and the future airport in each paragraph.
task achievement
You have identified the main changes and features well, which shows good understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas about the redevelopment are clear and specific, which is good.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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