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Band 3

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two drawings compare the layout of the
southwest
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 airport at present and its development plans.
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,
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 some features have been preserved,we will see some significant changes in the future with some additions of the new facilities and some expansions of the
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. Near the gates used for arrivals and departures,another new one will be added respectively.Inside the area for arrivals, three independent rooms will serve for new functions involving a cafe,
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atm
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ATM
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 and a car hire.Especially the car hire expand some
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.Inside the area for departures,the positions of the current facilities will be changed.The check-in area is planned to move to the opposite side replacing
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 a new bag drop.
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,the cafe is planned to move to the left corner near the gate.
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, the two divided
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 for passport control of
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security and customs remain
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 positions and some shops will be set nearby.On the top of the southwest airport,the
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 of the exiting gates will transform from eight to eighteen,so that the inside
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 will be expanded extremely and the walkways for passengers will be replaced with
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sky trains.These added gates are allocated to two sides with seven respectively,so that the image after development looks like Y.

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The introduction could be more specific in outlining the main changes that will occur in the airport layout. Consider mentioning both current features and the changes at the start of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the overall flow of the essay. Use transition phrases to improve the connection between sentences and paragraphs, helping the reader to follow your ideas more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Be mindful of grammar and spelling. For instance, 'atm' should be 'ATM' and 'expand' should be 'expands'. Proofreading can help catch small mistakes.
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Include a brief summary or conclusion that encapsulates the main changes. This gives your essay a more complete feel while reiterating the main points.
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The essay includes a good amount of detail about specific changes, such as the addition of the car hire and the new layout of the check-in area.
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You did a commendable job of comparing the current airport layout with the planned changes, which is essential for this task.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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