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Some people think technological development can reduce crime, while others think it would encourage crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, the argument about whether technological development
reduce
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 or
increase
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increases
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 in
crime
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being
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 popular.
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 I acknowledge that technological advancements have made
crime
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 more complex and varied, I still recognize that it works wonders in stopping
crime
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. Those who support that scientific improvement push the criminal
doing
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 something illegal view that technology gives perpetrators more opportunities.
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 with,
emergence
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 of new forms of
crime
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, cybercrime. The growth of the internet and digital systems has led to an increase in crimes
such
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hacking
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, identity theft and online telephone fraud.
In addition
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, some criminals use advanced technological tools to push traditional
crime
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 more efficiently and
easier
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.
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,
thefts
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thieves
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 can use specific
tool
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tools
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 to tamper
security
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with security
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 systems that rely on location tracking, which
make
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them
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it
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 easier to break into a home or business,
while
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 they only can damage the lock in the past time.
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, I will argue that technological development can reduce
crime
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. The first is that criminal recordings have become more common,
as
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for
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 example by the wide range of cameras in public places
such
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 as
street
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streets
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, shopping
center
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centers
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 and banks, which can act as
a barriers
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a barrier
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 to potential criminals.
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, the outcome of DNA analysis has revolutionized criminal investigations. A tiny sample of DNA that
left
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 in the spot, like hair, blood,
fingernail
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and fingernail
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, can be used to identify and convict the suspect.
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, in cases of sexual offence cases, DNA evidence is critical to find the aggressors.
This
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 technology has solved many cases that
has
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 ended up with nothing definite and has made it more difficult for aggressors to escape justice. In conclusion,
although
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 the development of technology
open
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 up new areas for criminal
behavior
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behaviour
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, I personally think that it
also
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provide
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 powerful tools for law enforcement to prevent and solve crimes.
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