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Some people believe that the arts (such as music, literature and theatre) are more important than other subjects in schools. Do you agree or disagree.

#people #arts #music #literature #theatre #subjects #schools
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There is no denying the fact that
arts
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subjects
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;
such
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 as music, theatre and literature. Are play a crucial role in teaching
students
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.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that
arts
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 are more critical than other
subjects
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 in educational institutions, there is
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 an argument that opposes that idea. In my opinion, I consider that,
although
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arts
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subjects
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 are essential in education, the importance of other
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is outweigh
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 them.
To begin
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 with,
students
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 can not complete their educational levels without focusing on essential
subjects
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such
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 as science
subjects
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 (math, science), or language learning.
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, those
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 help pupils to achieve progress in their studies.
In addition
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, providing
students
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 with key information for communication can help them to understand different
topics
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.
For example
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, teaching
students
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 language skills
are
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 crucial for dealing with any other
feild
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field
. Another point to consider is that
,
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 learners always
facing
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 difficulties in learning scientific
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, which they need to focus on as much as possible. It is
also
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 possible to say that, there are many
subjects
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need
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that need
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 to spend more
time
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 and
more
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effort.
Moreover
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, it is possible to inform pupils
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arts
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of arts
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topics
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 as an entertainment
time
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 with an allocated
time
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 less than
other
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others
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.
For instance
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,
schools
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 administrations in my country devote the
last
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 two classes in the study day to the
arts
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subjects
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. In conclusion, despite
arts
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subjects
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 having
own
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their own
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 importance without any doubt, I tend to believe that other educational
subjects
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 are more essential to spend
time
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 and effort on, and schools can dedicate a portion of the study day to the
arts
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subjects
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.
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