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Tourism is increasing many far reaching places. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#tourism #places
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In
this
 era of
fast paced
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 communications,
tourism
 is expanding in many parts of the world.
Although
 there are some cons
of
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this
curcumtance
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circumstance
, the pros of
the
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tourism
outweight
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outweigh
 the cons .
To begin
 with, when
tourists
 explore the far reaching
places
, it
significanly influcences
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significantly influences
 the economic condition of that region.
Due to
 the
tourists
, the local enterprises can be boosted with
larger
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 scale of production that can be offered to new consumers, resulting in an economic development of that part. Since
tourism
 attracts new consumers,
the
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business enterprises become willing to set up
business
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businesses
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 and factories in those areas to receive better exposure to
wider
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the wider
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 population.
Besides
,in order to make those
places
tourism friendly
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, local governments are bound to take some measures to improve the structural establishments, which
offters
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offers
an increased scope of
employmnet
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employment
 for the local people.
For example
, the
tourists
 require
accomodation
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accommodation
 in different tourist spots,
therefore
 hotels and resorts with modern amenities are established, where the local people get job
opportunity
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.
Additonally
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Additionally
,
tourism
 is an effective way to transfer and preserve local knowledge and conserve historical
places
. As the
tourists
 intend to explore the unique features of
places
, local governments are pushed to preserve the local history and present it to the new visitors. Not only it allows the
placces
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places
 to attract more
tourists
, but
also
 it enables the local government to receive more financial support from the governments that are required to maintain the local establishments.
Furthermore
, the visits of the
tourists
 increase the diversity of the culture of
places
 as they share knowledge and lifestyles of other parts of the country. It enables the local people to be influenced by the developed practices and culture of the world and make them
uptodate
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up-to-date
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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