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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #information #population #zealand #age #group #formation #features #comparisons
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The table below
give
Change the verb form
gives
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 information about the population of New
zealand
Change the capitalization
Zealand
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 between 2011 and 2012
bt
Correct your spelling
by
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 age
group
.
overall
, The 40-64 and 65+ groups
increaed
Correct your spelling
increased
 sharply,The under 15 and 15-39 groups decreased gradually.
Firstly
, the 65+
group
rising
Wrong verb form
rose
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 from 573,946 to 596,903 tallest in 4
group
Change to a plural noun
groups
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 but
population
Add an article
the population
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still
Add a missing verb
is still
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 at least. opposite, the 15-39
group
gone
Add a missing verb
has gone
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 down
shaprly
Correct your spelling
sharply
 from 1,557,256 to 1,574,102, the
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
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 of
popuation
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population
 salaries
is
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are
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 still at the largest
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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