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The given line graph illustrate the visit to Disneyland and Sea world form 2001 and 2005. The bar chart shows the most popular rides and and attractions in Disneyland. Summarise the main feature snad make comparison where relavant.

The given line graph illustrate the visit to Disneyland and Sea world form 2001 and 2005. The bar chart shows the most popular rides and and attractions in Disneyland. Summarise the main feature snad make comparison where relavant.
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The given line graph illustrates how many people visited
Disneyland
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 and
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Sea
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SeaWorld
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World
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 from 2001 and 2005. The given horizontal bar chart illustrates the most popular rides at
Disneyland
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.
Overall
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, the number of
visitors
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 in both amusement parks experienced an upward trend.
Moreover
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, Haunted
Mountain
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 and Splash
Mountain
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 were the most favourite rides among
visitors
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while
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 for the rest of the rides,
visitors
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 had relatively lowest
interests
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interest
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. In 2001, around 10
million
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visitors
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 visited both
Disneyland
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 and
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Sea
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SeaWorld
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World
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.
Moreover
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, in 2002, around 20
million
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 and around 10
million
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visitors
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 visited
Disneyland
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 and the
Sea
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World
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 respectively. After that, the popularity of
Disneyland
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 increased dramatically. In 2005, approximately 52
Million
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visitors
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 visited
Disneyland
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. Meanwhile, the visitor of the
Sea
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World
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also
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 increased throughout the period, and in 2005, around 17
million
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visitors
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 visited the
Sea
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World
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. In
Disneyland
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, roughly 13
million
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visitor
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visitors
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 liked Splash
Mountain
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 which was the most popular ride,
while
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 around 9
million
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visitors
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 liked Haunted
Mountain
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. Only approximately 1
million
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visitors
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 liked Jungle Cruise and that was the least favourite.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words disneyland, sea, world, visitors, mountain, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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