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The graph below shows predictions about the number of people who will study three major world languages between 2020 and 2030

The graph below shows predictions about the number of people who will study three major world languages between 2020 and 2030
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The line
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 illustrates estimations about how many people
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 likely to study
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,
Spanish
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 and
Mandarin
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 from 2020 to 2023.
overall
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, what stands out from the
graph
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 is that the amount of
learners
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 in
Spanish
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 and
Mandarin
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 languages were relatively similar, which meant that both of them
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raised
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rose
 gradually and
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 to improve considerably over the period. At
which
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 point, the number of
English
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students
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were
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was
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 significantly higher than the other language
learners
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 (
Spanish
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 and
Mandarin
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) and
also
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, the
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learners
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are
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 estimated to
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 the peak of the
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. If we look at
Mandarin
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learners
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, the figure started at 100
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Milions
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students
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 in 2020 and following that, there was a remarkable upward in 2024, it rocketing to around 300
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Milions
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Million
. As regards
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Mandarin
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students
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, despite rising
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gradually
, it is set to
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Spanish
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learners
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 in 2026 and after that, it is likely to finish at around 600
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Milions
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 in 2030, which
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 that it would be higher than the
Spanish
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 language
learners
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.
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, the amount of
Spanish
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 language
learners
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 increased steadily between 2020 and 2024 by around 100
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Milions
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Million
 to 300
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Milions
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Million
. At
which
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this
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 point, the figure is forecast to rise
moderatelly
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moderately
 and finish at around 500
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milions
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million
students
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 in 2030.
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, in the first four years of the
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decade,
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 the
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learners
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 experienced a sharp
improve
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,
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which
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 was so far higher than
Spanish
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 and
Mandarin
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students
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. As for 2024 and 2028, the figure is expected to dip considerably before rising to the peak of the
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 at approximately 750
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milions
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million
 in 2023.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, english, spanish, mandarin, learners, students, milions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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