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Band 4.5

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#aim #science #people #lives
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innovation
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innovations
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science
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make
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 the life of
people
 pretty easy and comfortable. It is believed that
science
 should always aim to uplift
people
's way of living. I completely
accord
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 with
this
 notion since it not only
reduced
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work load
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also
reduce
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 the complexity of tasks
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with
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 the most prominent reason
innovation
 of
science
have
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make
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people
like
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more
relax
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 than without the use of innovative technology
for example
 it is
science
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a science
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 which
have
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 developed a machine
name
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 washing machines through which
people
 can easily
was
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be
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the
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dirty clothes in a very little time without any stress
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have
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also
 make a way of living quite easy through
innovation
 in
science
 we can store data for a longer period of time that would not have been
lendi
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lending
 through
other medium
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another medium
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for instance
 through the
innovation
 of computer we can store data for a long period of time without any complexity which would have been a big task if we store through paper For the more
also
 there are some negative
aspect
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this
 as it
increase
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 dependency
as well as
stop
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 of development it has
increase
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increased
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 the way
of
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people
 rely more on
calculator
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calculators
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 even to solve a small mathematical problem which reduce their capability to solve a problem
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 previously there was no use of calculator in school during our father generations and because of that they have a habit of doing simple
as well as
 complex mathematical problem by themselves but we could not expect that from ourself
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 from our
childrens
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children
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conclusion
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all
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though
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 there are some drawbacks of
science
 I strongly believe that through
science
 our life has been more easy and convenient than our ancestor
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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