Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

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level of poverty is one of the major concerns among the
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.
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,some
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believes
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that giving
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to
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homeless individuals is the best method to tackle
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issue.
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,I totally disagree with
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this
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statement that providing
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to
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humans is not
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suitable
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for
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matter.In
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essay,I will elaborate my opinion in detail.
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with,Homeless individuals are struggling for
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to fulfil their needs,But,it is not possible to give the fund to all the
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itinerants
.Even so, The Government can help
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individuals by providing free education for
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upto
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the
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of 18.
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,humans are suffering
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different kinds of
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.Most of them cannot afford the prices for treating the disease conditions.
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, free medical services
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also
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a benefit for homeless citizens.
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,In India, government authorities are giving free health
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for
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above the
age
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of 60.
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is highly
benifical
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beneficial
for homeless
people
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.
Other
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method is to give
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oppurtunity
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opportunity
to adults.It helps them to earn
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money
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as well as
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fulfil their basic requirements.
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,70 per cent of elder
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are facing difficulties
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in getting
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a
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offer after their degree courses.So,the authorities should provide a suitable
job
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for them.
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,the government should provide
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pension to the
oldage
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old
people
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,At
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age
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,
people
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cannot
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able to do their work
as
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young
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a young
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age
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.
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,after finishing the
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of 60
monthy
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monthly
months
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of pension
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pension
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is
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requires them to live in
better
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a better
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way
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. In
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conclusion
,providing
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is not the only
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to help
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homeless humans.I
believes
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that the other methods like free education and medical services.
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,giving
pension
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pensions
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to old
age
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and
job
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oppurtunities
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opportunities
for elder
people
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is
the
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suitable
way
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to overcome
this
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matter.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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