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ome people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#ome #people #governments #money #life #planets #waste #earth
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Nowadays, there
is
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are
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 two
differents
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different
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opinion
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opinions
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 about exploring other planets to find
life
 on them.
One
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On
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 the one hand, some people crave
to
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the to
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government
 spend the resources looking for
life
 on another
planet
,
on the other hand
, others believe that,
while
 we
are already have
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already have
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 so many downsides on
earth
, it would be just
waste
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a waste
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 of public
money
.
Lets
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Let's
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 talk about the opinion of
first
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the first
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 half of
persons
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people
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. If we intend to listen to
they
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their
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 thoughts,
first
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the first
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 thing they tell us is that because of the
problems
 on
earth
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Earth
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government
 must spend that
money
 looking for another
planet
 with
life
.
Prime
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The prime
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 reason for their
dicision
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decision
 is overpopulation. They believe, that in
near
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the near
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 future
on
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apply
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this
planet would
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will
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 be no space
to
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for
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comfort
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comfortable
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 living.
In addition
,
their
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there
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wuld
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would
 be
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a luck
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luck
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lack
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of
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if
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 not
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for poluted
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poluted
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polluted
 air, which would cause
serios
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serious
problems
 with health. In their point of view, it is easier to explore and in the future move to another
planet
, that
get
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 rid of all the
problems
 on
earth
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Earth
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.
Other
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The other
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 half believe, that
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the dovernment
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dovernment
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government
, in the first place, should deal with
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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on
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of
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 our
planet
 and solve them, rather than spend public
money
 on
explouring
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exploiting
 another
planet
.
Furthermore
, if
government
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the government
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 would just ignore the
problems
 as overpopulation, air
polution
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pollution
,
increasing
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and increasing
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 number of
diceases
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diseases
,
then
 if we move to
athother
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another
planet
this
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these
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problems
 intend to be with us. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 want to say that
i
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I
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 agree with both
view
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views
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, in
certain
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a certain
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 way. In the meantime,
i
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I
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 think
government
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the government
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 must solve
the
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apply
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all the
ploblems
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problems
 with our
earth
, only
then
 spend
money
 looking for
life
 on other planets as plan b.
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