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The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Writing Task 1

The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Writing Task 1
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demonstrate
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us
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 the results of adults in the
Uk
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UK
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attend
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attending
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 art events
the
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last
 20 years.
Overall
, participation rates in all events have not remained the same over the
last
 20 years. As seen
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 statistics, more than 50%of the UK
adults
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 population still attends specific performances as they did 20 years ago. The
percent
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 of
Accompaning
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accompanying
 children attending shows a gradual increase. We can see the
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 of special
occasion
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celebration
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a
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gradual
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 decrease followed by a sudden fall. The business event attendance rates have increased by only 1% in the
last
 decade.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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